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【英文写作】 如何写出感动阅卷老师的记叙文?技巧来啦!
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【英文写作】 如何写出感动阅卷老师的记叙文?技巧来啦!
记叙文是以叙述为主要表达方式,以写人物的经历和事物发展变化为主要内容的一种文体。在历届高考的书面表达中,记叙文占有很大比例。
记叙文包括的范围很广,如日记、游记、传说、小说、新闻、通讯等,这些都属于记叙文范畴。它通常分为三类:以记人为主的记叙文,要以人物为中心组织材料,把人物的经历、行为或事迹体现出来;以叙事为主的记叙文,即以事件为中心组织材料,围绕中心事件写作;以写景状物为主的记叙文。记叙文写作可适当发表见解、议论和抒情。
记叙文的六要素:时间(when)、地点(where)、人物(who)、事件(what)、原因(why)和结果(how)。
【写作任务】(北京卷)
假设你是红星中学高三一班的学生李华。你班同学参加了学校的“地球日”系列活动。请按照以下四幅图的先后顺序,以“Actions for a Greener Earth”为题,给校刊“英语角”写一篇英文稿件,介绍活动的全过程。
注意:词数不少于60。
提示词:地球日 Earth Day
【审题】
此书面表达设题为情景作文,体裁为记叙文。整篇短文以第一人称为主,时态主要用一般过去时。审题时要仔细看图,理清所给图片之间的内在联系,这是此文成功的关键;写作时要抓住重点,要按照图片的先后顺序行文,详略得当,情节完整;要恰当地使用过渡成分。
【谋篇布局】
第一步——确定短文结构
根据图片的顺序和记叙文的一般结构,本文可以分为三段:第一段描写同学们在公告栏了解到活动内容,引出主题;第二段详细叙述“爱护地球,变废为宝”的班级活动;第三段进行总结并表达感想。
第二步——确定写作要点和写作顺序
高分策略:以基本句型为主,注意动词时态的选用,要点要齐全,注意句与句之间的联系和段与段之间的自然过渡。
1. 我们看到号召我们加入保护地球行动的海报。
参考句型:
◆A week before Earth Day, posters were put up around our school, calling upon us to join in the actions for a greener earth.
◆A week before Earth Day, we were excited to see some posters in our school calling on us to take part in the actions for a greener earth.
◆A week before Earth Day, we were attracted by some posters in our school, which appealed to us to take action to protect the earth.
2. ……提出了废物利用的想法,同学们从家拿了很多旧东西,像……,我们变废为宝。
参考句型:
◆ Our class came up with the idea to make better use of used materials.
◆ Our class put forward the idea to make the best use of used materials.
◆ It occurred to me that we could make the most use of used materials.
◆ We brought to our classroom some ... and turned those into...
3. 我们把成品分给他人,特别受……的欢迎。
参考句型:
◆ That weekend, we went to a nearby neighborhood and gave them away to the people there.
◆ At the weekend, we shared those things with the people in a nearby neighborhood.
◆ That weekend, we went to a nearby neighborhood, where we gave them to the people there as gifts.
◆ All were very happy with those unexpected gifts, especially …
◆ All of them were very pleased/content/satisfied with those unexpected gifts, especially …
◆ Those who got our handmade gifts were so happy. We were satisfied.
4. 我们被邀请同……分享经验。
参考句型:
◆ We did so well that we were invited to share our idea and experience with…
◆ Because we did well, we were invited to share our idea and experience with…
◆ For doing well, we were invited to share our idea and experience with…
◆ We did well; as a consequence/ as a result/ consequently/ thus, we were invited to share our idea and experience with…
5. 我们感到很自豪,相信我们可以做更多的事情。
参考句型:
◆ We are very proud of ourselves and believe we can do more for a better world.
◆ Feeling proud of ourselves, we believe we will do a lot for a greener earth.
◆ We are very proud of ourselves and determined to do better.
【参考范文】
(温馨提示:有下划线处为好词好句。)
Actions for a Greener Earth
A week before Earth Day, posters were put up around our school, calling upon us to join in the actions for a greener earth.
Our class came up with the idea to make better use of used materials. We brought to our classroom worn-out clothes, pieces of cardboard and empty plastic bottles, and turned those into dolls, handbags, tissue boxes and small vases. That weekend, we went to a nearby neighborhood and gave them away to the people there. All were very happy with those unexpected gifts, especially little kids and elderly people. We did so well that we were invited to share our idea and experience with all the students of our school.
We are very proud of ourselves and believe we can do more for a better world.
【点评】
此记叙文主题明确,分段合理,写作顺序清晰,语言简洁,句式多样,使用了V-ing形式作状语、不定式作定语、状语从句、并列句等句式结构,有效地使用了语句间的衔接成分。